1.My Summer Vacation
I have taken a relax summer vacation. I wasn't just did my homework this time.I did a plan for myself.I had some good expenrience.First of all,did more physical exercises(Dose need plus s?)my thought.I played basketball every night and swam sometimes.When I did these exercises,I always felt very exciting.After that,I was very active to do anything.Exercise give me many things such as happy,relax and outgoing.
The other thing was my English.I was very hard to learn it for competition with my father.Actually,I find if only I learn it conscientious ,I will fall in love with English.English is a very interesting language,I think.Learn it make me happy.
It's a plentiful vacation I did.

My Summer Vacation
I have taken (1)a relax summer vacation. I (2)wasn't just did my homework this time. (3)I did a plan for myself. I had some good experience. First of all, (4)did more physical exercises((5)Dose need plus s?)(6)my thought. I played basketball every night and swam sometimes. When I did these exercises, I always felt very exciting. (7)After that, I was very active to do anything. (8)Exercise give me many (9)things such as happy, relax and outgoing.
(10)The other thing was my English. (11)I was very hard to learn it for competition with my father. Actually, (12)I find if only I (13)learn it conscientious , I will fall in love with English. English is a very interesting language, (14)I think. (15)Learn it make me happy.
It's a (16)plentiful vacation I did.

1. a relax summer vacation- relax是动词, 文中是形容词的用法. 用relaxing来形容令人relax的事物.
2. wasn’t just did-was did显然是语法错误, was后的动词要进行时态. Wasn’t just doing 或didn’t just do.
3. did a plan- Plan是名词, 不是动词, 不能do, 只能make.
4. 缺少主语.
5. 不需要s
6. 这里需要和前半句连接. More…than… 另外这里不能用my thought. 因为 exercise和 thought无法对比. 完整的说法是did more physical exercise than I thought I would.
7. 这里需要更具体的说明that是什么, 是在你假期中所有的运动做完之后, 还是每次运动之后.
8. exercise本身并不给你任何东西, 是你做exercise的过程得到的东西. 所以这里应该是 “Exercising gave me…”注意这里应该是过去时.
9. happy/relax/outgoing是形容词, 不是thing. 相应的名词为happiness/relaxation/outgoingness.
10. First of all…the other thing不相配. First of all 自然要接secondly, 与the other thing对应的当然是one thing
11. 显然, 你不是想说你学英文的时候硬了 (EH…当然你真有这个意思除外). 所以very hard应该作为一个adv放在learn it后面. Was learning it very hard/learned it very hard都行. 另外competition要加冠词.
12. I find后面应该是某个东西, 所以这里要加连接性词把后面的当成一个东西. I found that if…不要忘了过去时态.
13. conscientious是形容词, 做adv加-ly, conscientiously.
14. 文章里在阐述你的观点的时候永远不要用I think, 因为整篇文章都是你think出来的, 不用特别说明. 只在真正形容你think的动作的时候用I think.
15. 这里要用进行时的动词, 因为只有learning这个进行中的过程可以做名词, learn是一个动作概念, 不能做名词.
另外make要加s因为learning这个过程是单数
16. vacation是名词, 不能do, 当然这里也不能make, 只能have

主要要注意的问题就是词性. 其他方面都很好, 基本没有文法上的错误.